Can someone help grade my APUSH FRQ?

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Question: Explain the causes and consequences of TWO of the following population movementsin the United States during the period 1945–1985.</p>

Suburbanization</p>

The growth of the Sun Belt</p>

Immigration to the United States</p>

Essay: </p>

Throughout history there have been many shifts of population. These mass movements of people are often times responsible for many changes that have long lasting effects. In America, between 1945 and 1985, there was also a shift of people who moved from Europe to America and also people moving from the City to the Suburbs which had many effects on American Society.</p>

For example, after World War II, many people desperately wanted to get out of war torn Europe. Since there was no real fighting going on in America, we were left virtually untouched by the destruction caused by the war. Due to this, many people decided to leave Europe and come to America to start a new life. This caused another rise of the nativist ideology in America. Many Americans disliked and were prejudiced against many foreigners. This led to many hate crimes all across the country. This same immigration of Europeans to the U.S. also helped the rise of the KKK who hated not only blacks, but also foreigners. The KKK would grab onto anything to gain power and committed many hate crimes in order to gain nativist public support. Because of this, many foreigners were forced to form their own ethnic communities of their own nationalities in order to help each other out, the same type of help that many Americans refused to give. This gave rise to many communities known as China Town or Little Italy. The United States during this time became an almost international nation. It is during this time that we coined the term “the melting pot”. Many of the immigrants who moved to America during this time left many cultural impacts that became part of today’s American Culture. </p>

Furthermore, many Americans were looking for a way to leave the poverty and crime that were in many major cities. The creation of Levitt towns acted as a major catalyst for the movement from the city to the suburbs. These planned communities gave an affordable way for families to have their own home and yard, but also allowed for them to be close enough to commute to the city in order to work. Now people could enjoy the prosperity of a city job while also enjoying the semi-seclusion of life in the suburbs. Now that people had a home of their own, they spent the surplus of money, that many were enjoying after World War II, to buy things such as TV’s, Radios and Cars. Shows such as “I love Lucy” and “The Brady Bunch” became a hit mainly due to the support received from the suburban family. Many families in the suburbs identified with these shows and therefore had a major role in shaping American Television Culture during this time. This mass consumerism also helped to give rise to Henry Ford’s assembly line cars. Since many suburban families needed a way to get to work, Ford’s cheap line of cars were the perfect solution. In short, the movement of people to the suburbs had many lasting effects.</p>

People always choose to move from one place to another for some reason. Many of these push-pull factors are responsible for many of the changes that can be still felt today. If people stayed stagnant then many things would stay unchanged, and society would cease to move forward.</p>

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This would get you a 5 along with somewhat decent MC scores.</p>