Can someone help me on my Columbia Personal Statement?

<p>Hey guys, I'm applying as a transfer applicant and I would greatly appreciate someone willing to look at an essay and give me feedback. I'd rather it be someone with a higher post count (although I'm not one to talk) and not an applicant of this year's admission cycle (for transfer at least). Call me paranoid, but its college admissions. What do ya expect?</p>

<p>Anyways, please post here if you are willing. Thanks!</p>