<p>to work hard - even in spite of circumstances, to never give up - even in the face of extreme pressure, and most importantly, to have a dream - even when the world may seem like a terrible nightmare.</p>
<p>It doesn't look/feel right grammatically speaking. Can someone with a little free time help revise it for me?</p>
<p>…to work hard in spite of adverse circumstances, to never give up in the face of pressure, and to have a dream even when the world seems like a terrible nightmare…</p>
<p>“world seems like a terrible nightmare” is not good, though. Can you think of something less melodramatic?</p>