can someone help me with my appeal letter

<p>hi..this is the first time i'm posting here. I came across this forum while i was researching for appeal information. I am a transfer student for Fall 2007, and I'm trying to write a letter appealing for my denied admission to Cal..would anybody kindly enough willing to read my letter and give me any critiques or suggestion? thanks in advance for your help ! ^^</p>

<p>Some previous threads about appeals:</p>

<p><a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=341458%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=341458&lt;/a>
<a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=333885%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=333885&lt;/a>
<a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=320721%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?t=320721&lt;/a>
Although these are about freshman appeals, but i dont think there is much difference</p>