Can someone help revise my personal statement?

I’m applying to Michigan State University, and I really want my essay to be good. According to others, I should be able to get in even with a week essay (MSU GPA 3.88, ACT 30) (MSU’s averages 3.6 GPA, ACT 26).
Here is the prompt:
Michigan State University recognizes that an assortment of interests, viewpoints, and life experiences are important in student learning and enhance the university community. Describe an experience, passion, or characteristic that illustrates what you would contribute to the MSU community and how this will add to the overall richness of campus life.

Respond, and I’ll PM my essay. Thank you!

I’ll love to read ur essay! Class of 2016 as well.