Can someone look over my MIT and Stanford supplements?

College Essays
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Hi! I have been editing them quite a lot lately, but I’m not sure how these essays will be perceived when other people read it. Any critiques and feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

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I can take a look. pm me.

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im free

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Thank you BlingBlingBling! I’ll PM you

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Thanks otoribabshi! I’ll PM you.

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I’ll take a look

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I can take a look