Can someone please critic my essay?

[qt314aaa]

<p>Please be very harsh, I don't mind.</p>

[halcyonheather]

<p>I can read it.</p>

[SpaceBound007]

<p>I can also read it if you want. Just PM me.</p>

[dawidskalkowski]

<p>I’ll gladly read it.</p>

[yangmaster]

<p>I can read it. PM me.</p>

[ilovelifewow]

<p>I’ll read it :)</p>

[soontobegrad]

<p>Pm me. I will read it</p>

[Nekogami]

<p>Pm me as well</p>

[AAAcollege]

<p>I can read it</p>

[gotadream]

<p>I will read it</p>

[gingerfury07]

<p>I can read it.</p>

[doctorhorrible96]

<p>I can read it!</p>

[Chlobird]

<p>I can read it</p>