Can someone please edit my additional info. section on the commonapp?

<p>Could you please edit for grammar? I know it isn't the finest writing, but my essay is much more polished. </p>

<p>I'll just post it on here because no one can steal this stuff...</p>

<p>-I received school academic excellence awards in "Civics Honors" and "Civil Engineering and Architecture."</p>

<p>-I received recognition awards in "Spanish 5 Honors" and "Spanish AP."</p>

<p>-I am a Wesleyan High School Scholar. Because I fulfilled Wesleyan's prequisites, I applied and was accepted into this program. As a result, I was allowed to take a class at Wesleyan University. I chose to take "Principles of Chemistry I." I am also taking "Principles of Chemistry II" second semester. </p>

<p>-This year I began to organize a new club at my school to provide aid in the form of tutoring to students who feel they need it. Although our school currently offers tutoring, we felt it was much too formal resulting in few people participating. This new club provides informal tutoring to students who do not want to feel as if they being forced to attend. Contrary to the older system at my school, a student in need of tutoring does not need to attend tutoring sessions every week. At this point, we are gathering fellow seniors as tutors. Our next objective is to have these tutors meet with teachers who will give input in regards to how to provide. This club has been formally approved by the Board of Education.</p>

<p>-I am the president of the International Culture Club. I have helped organize cultural activities for each weekly meeting. For example, we have made the traditional shoes children in Spain put out during Christmas in hopes of receiving gifts. We have also had several guest speakers from the individual countries we are studying. As president, I have also organized a bake sale that raised money to loan to inspiring entrepaneurs in third world countries.</p>

<p>-I have done a community service project for the church where a group of church members went to a house in a poor neighborhood to remodel it. This activity lasted for about seven hours.</p>

<p>-Since junior year, I have played in my school's basketball recreational league during the winter.</p>

<p>During my sophomore year, I organized a club that would help the troops who have fought for America. After telling two of my friends of my idea, we organized a group and named it the "Support Our Country" Club. Our purpose has since expanded to help anyone in need in America. Since formation, we have organized multiple successful item drives for care packages that we send to the troops through a local organization. This year we have incorporated more aid to veterans and not just active soldiers. My fellow creators and I are proud to have helped those in need especially America's sons and daughters stationed in the Middle East.</p>

<p>Here's a quick run-thru: Compare it with your original to see if the changes make sense and if you prefer them.</p>

<p>-I received school academic excellence awards in "Civics Honors" and in "Civil Engineering and Architecture."</p>

<p>-I received recognition awards in "Spanish 5 Honors" and in "Spanish AP."</p>

<p>-I am a Wesleyan High School Scholar. Because I fulfilled Wesleyan's prerequisites, I applied and was accepted into this program and as a result, I was allowed to take a class at Wesleyan University. I chose to take "Principles of Chemistry I." I am also taking "Principles of Chemistry II" second semester. </p>

<p>-This year I began to organize a new club at my school to provide aid in the form of tutoring to students who feel they need it. Although our school currently offers tutoring, we felt it was much too formal resulting in few people participating. This new club provides informal tutoring to students who do not want to feel as if they are being forced to attend. Contrary to the older system at my school, a student in need of tutoring does not need to attend tutoring sessions every week. At this point, we are gathering fellow seniors as tutors. Our next objective is to have these tutors meet with teachers who will give input in regards to how to provide. This club has been formally approved by the Board of Education.</p>

<p>-I am the president of the International Culture Club. I have helped organize cultural activities for each weekly meeting. For example, we have made the traditional shoes children in Spain put out during Christmas in hopes of receiving gifts. We have also had several guest speakers from the individual countries we are studying. As president, I have also organized a bake sale that raised money for loans to inspiring entrepreneurs in third world countries.</p>

<p>-I have done a community service project for the church where a group of church members went to a house in a poor neighborhood to remodel it. This activity lasted for about seven hours.</p>

<p>-Since junior year, I have played in my school's basketball recreational league during the winter.</p>

<p>During my sophomore year, I organized a club that would help the troops who have fought for America. After telling two of my friends of my idea, we organized a group and named it the "Support Our Country" Club. Our purpose has since expanded to help anyone in need in America. Since formation, we have organized multiple successful item drives for care packages that we send to the troops through a local organization. This year we have incorporated more aid to veterans and not just active soldiers. My fellow creators and I are proud to have helped those in need, especially America's sons and daughters stationed in the Middle East.</p>