Can someone please read and critique my essay?

<p>Hey guys.. I'm taking a risk with my essay by writing it in an unconventional manner.</p>

<p>Can someone please read and comment on my essay?</p>

<p>Thanks a lot!</p>

<p>sure, i was deferred EA, PM if you want :)</p>

<p>I’d be glad to read it, especially since it’s unconventional. Class of 2015, so no worries. Feel free to PM it to me.</p>

<p>uhhh the number of posts really makes me feel uneasy
anyone else? [preferably experienced :slight_smile: ]</p>

<p>I’m an EA admit, PM me if you want.</p>

<p>I’m a published author and mom of an ED accepted student at an LAC. PM away.</p>

<p>Feel free to PM to me, as well.</p>

<p>can anyone else please read this?
i thought the yale forum would be the best to post this at because I am mainly concerned with whther or not this will be too risky to send to yale</p>