Can someone please read the second part of my personal statement essay??

<p>UC Prompt 2: What about this quality, talent, accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

<p>Response:
Throughout my life, my talent has been drawing. Having this special talent is extremely important to me due to the fact that no one in my family has this talent. Another reason why this talent is important to me is because this talent helps me fulfill my dreams of becoming a professional graphic designer. It makes me feel special because I will be the first individual in my family to pursue a career in graphic design. My mother said “this talent is a god given talent and not everyone has this talent like I do.” I believed her, it is truly a “god given talent.” I will sacrifice anything to reach my dreams in life.
It makes me proud when I draw well because I know that I used the talent that I always had and put all my effort into that talent. The idea that I can use this talent to express my emotions and feelings through my artwork makes me proud. To have this talent is an advantage because I can use it to teach others. This talent is an inspiration in reaching my highest potential in life and inspires me to not give up. Ever since I was a child, I have a passion for art, but never perceived it to be a career I would pursue in the future.
When I was a child, I always thought this talent was just a hobby. I never realized that it was a talent I have until my sophomore year of high school. Ever since I enrolled in the School of Creative and Performing Arts (SCPA) Program, I knew that this was not a hobby, but rather a talent and what I truly have passion for. While learning about creating logos and images on computer in Computer Art class, I knew graphic design is what I want to do for the rest of my life. However, it was my first exposure in drawing images on computer, I quickly found my true passion and knew this is what I want to be doing in the future as my career.
I put my soul, heart, and passion into art. I am very blessed to have this wonderful talent. This talent gives me the hope of one day becoming a professional graphic designer. My talent has shaped the person I am today, allowing me to obtain a creative mind and becoming a more open-minded individual. It is special and sacred, that will be cherished and will remain in my heart forever. </p>

<p>Look for any spelling, grammar, punctuation, sentence structure errors. Please give me
critiques to improve my essay also!</p>

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<p>Please??????? Can someone critique my essay?? =((</p>