Can someone proofread/critique my UC Application Prompt #1?

[Ankur1521]

<p>I'll proofread/critique yours if you proofread/critique mine.</p>

[blu3]

<p>sure ill read yours.</p>

[mistofthekane]

<p>Sure I'll read yours. I've already submitted, so yeah. PM it over.</p>

[oyeme312644]

<p>ill read yours as well. can you read mine in return?</p>