Can someone proofread my essay?

College Essays
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<p>Can someone look over my two UC prompts? I'm a transfer applicant. I'm applying to only UCLA out of the UCs. My major is economics. I might end up being borderline if I get a B in Calculus so I need to make these statements really good. Being 16 might help my chances, but still. The statements are a bit exaggerated but not all that much. If anyone is willing to read them, feel free to be as harsh as you want. </p>

<p>For my "personal quality" one, I wrote about how I started college at fourteen and succeeded at it.</p>

<p>My "intended major" one...well that speaks for itself I guess.</p>

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<p>I forgot to mention. Specifically, the prompts are:
What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field — such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities — and what you have gained from your involvement.</p>

<p>Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>