Can someone rate my essay?

Applying to College
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<p>Would someone be able to read my essay for the University of Chicago? I'll message you for the full essay, but as a preview, here is an outline: </p>

<p>Topic: Find X</p>

<p>Let x = my intentions
explain intentions
the derivative of my intentions is my thoughts
explain thoughts
the derivative of my thoughts is i
explain myself
i = sq. rt of a negative number (non-real number under normal conditions)
explain uniqueness
in essence, i = unreal
that means, the second derivative of x = unreal/0
impossible to have 0 intentions, therefore my intentions are unreal under normal conditions
explain how my intentions exist only under abnormal circumstances, therefore x only exists under abnormal circumstances.
In order to “find x,” one must incorporate an abnormal variable
the variable is UC
meaning, at UC, I will find x, which means I will find my true intentions, which means i can find my thoughts (intentions derive from thoughts), etc.</p>

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<p>uhh…whatt??</p>

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<p>I think this could be excellent if you wrote it in the format of a proof, with paragraph breaks to elaborate what you mean. Hahaha I wish I could come up with these things when I need them; I’m always relating Mathematics to useless blabbering.</p>

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<p>I’ll read the whole thing if you PM me.</p>

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<p>I hope you realize “Find x.” was a prompt for LAST YEAR, not this year.</p>

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<p>I realize it was the prompt last year. I still want feedback on it</p>

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<p>Oops, change “intentions” to “true potential”</p>