Can someone read my Applicant Statement?

<p>I am applying to a summer program in Namibia with National Geographic. Its purpose is focused on wildlife conservation. I have to write a 200-300 word statement explaining why I want to go and what I could bring to the group. Here it is:</p>

<pre><code>"Animals have always been my passion. I read books, watch movies, and ponder over their behavior, biology, and ecology. Wildlife conservation is a cause that is so interesting and important to me; it is my passion. I have enjoyed reading about population dynamics in textbooks and watching documentaries on climate change, but nothing will ever match the experience of actually receiving first-hand knowledge of conservation work. Namibia is home to such a unique ecosystem, and I want the chance to work alongside experts on projects concerning Africa’s wildlife—a treasure that needs careful protection. Wildlife conservation is what I want to pursue as a career someday, and the knowledge and experience I gain on this expedition will surely be applied to whatever field of conservation I find myself in after college. This trip will take me past knowing, and let me feel and see. This is an amazing opportunity to observe conservation work in a country with such an important ecosystem and with a people that cares so much for this national treasure. Second only to my love of animals is my love of learning about other cultures and ways of life. I have spent over a decade of my life living in Southwestern China—an area known for its need for conservation work. I will bring to the Namibia Expedition a unique global perspective fostered an ocean away, but one that has given me a desire to see the world through another culture’s eyes regardless of where it is—a skill that will be important on this expedition. I hope that this summarization of my passions and motivations has truly been able to show you how I will bring unique experiences to the expedition, and how I will constantly be ready to learn, inquire, and wonder."
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<p>Comments? Critiques? Any advice would be appreciated.</p>

<p>This is the specific program I'm applying for in case anyone wanted to know: Namibia</a> | National Geographic Student Expeditions </p>

<p>(Yes, I realize this is more appropriate for the summer programs board, but this board gets more traffic and I would like to get feedback rather quickly)</p>

<p>Don’t post your essays on the Internet for all and sundry to steal.</p>

<p>I figured it was so specific to a certain program that I’d be okay. I don’t think I can delete this post now anyways.</p>