Can someone read my Common App Transfer essay?

<p>I've posted this in the Transfers forum, too. </p>

<p>For those who are unfamiliar with the transfer essay, the prompt is simple: why do you want to transfer?</p>

<p>In addition to knowing something unique about you, adcoms look for compelling, legitimate reasons for wanting to leave your current college and why another college is best for you (e.g. school doesn't offer major, school not challenging enough, finances, etc). The CA essay isn't supposed to be school-specific; schools have supplements for that.</p>

<p>For those willing to read, I HAVE to cut it down (thanks for enforcing the word limit, CA...). Please suggest how I can cut it down at least 100 words. I would also appreciate critiques and opinions, too. Thanks!</p>

<p>bump…</p>

<p>;) </p>