Can someone read my commonapp essay?

[killbeefgoham]

<p>I'd love it if I could get a quick critique on my essay draft. Thanks in advance</p>

[mpewangy]

<p>i would like to read it for you.</p>

[yayitsme123]

<p>I’ll read it! PM it to me :)</p>

[CHD2013]

<p>I’d be happy to read it</p>