Can someone read my essay and give insights?

<p>I'm applying as a junior transfer to U of Chicago.</p>

<p>I wrote an essay and it was (initially) intended for extended supplementary, but someone told me it's better to use this for Common Application essay(personal statement of Why you want to transfer, objectives wanting to achieve). Does anyone bother to read it and decide it for me real quick?</p>

<p>bump !!! anyone please?</p>

<p>pm me ...
if u awnt</p>