can someone read over my UC college essay for the first prompt?

College Essays
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<p>im still working on my 2nd essay, but the prompt for the first essay is:
Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>please let me know if you're willing to look over it for me!
thanks :)</p>

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<p>I will if you want :)</p>

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<p>sure</p>

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<p>I’d be glad to help! The essays I wrote for those prompts are fresh in my mind :)</p>