Can someone take a look at my essay?

<p>I think I solved some issues I posted here a while ago, about the nature of common app prompt 2. I don't know how well the result turned out. Can someone look at it for me and provide suggestions? Thanks! :)</p>

<p>P.S I'm not sure if I can PM, I don't have 15 posts yet. I'll look into it. </p>