Can you critique my essay?

<p>It would mean the world to me! =] I'm trying to get into University of Central Florida! please and thank you!</p>

<p>You can PM me if you want.</p>

<p>I'll be happy to review it. Send it through a PM.</p>

<p>Over here :)</p>

<p>sure; send a PM!</p>

<p>Sure. Feel free to PM me.</p>

<p>Ya, PM me por favor.</p>