Can you read/edit my personal statement? Is it *too* personal?

Deleted this because I read the plagiarism thread :(

If anyone is willing to look over my statement, it would be SO helpful!

This is for the second prompt, by the way. “Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?”

I’ll be glad to take a read. just message me :slight_smile: