<p>I was wondering if anyone could proofread and give me critiques on my essay. I want you to be brutal because I plan on applying to UCLA, who I know get amazing application essays every year. Thanks so much and I really appreciate it!</p>
<p>I was wondering if anyone could proofread and give me critiques on my essay. I want you to be brutal because I plan on applying to UCLA, who I know get amazing application essays every year. Thanks so much and I really appreciate it!</p>