can't get it write -- proofread?

College Essays
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<p>(Ignore my pathetic pun up there. haha)</p>

<p>I've finished writing all the essays necessary except for "Why ___". I've got a rough outline, but for the life of me I can't seem to iron it out enough to flow well. My other essays are all quite articulate; this one seems to have been written by a 7 year old. And I can't, for some reason, manage to make it any better.</p>

<p>Anyone up for reading and giving suggestions?</p>

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<p>Sure I'll read. And I agree with you; those why essays are nasty to write</p>

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<p>It would be better to prof-read it, but if you've got no professors at hand, I'll suggest improvements.</p>