<p>Hello everybody. I was just wondering if someone could go over my essay, preferably someone who has a good amount of experience here on CC. The essay is quite ruff around the edges, but I'm just hoping to see the vibe people pick up from my essay,and whether I should continue to pursue the topic it's on. </p>
<p>This essay is intended for top tier colleges, so please don't sugarcoat anything.</p>