<p>I do not have an ending - I did, but my English teacher told me I was trying to fit in too many abstract concepts, although it was really only 2. So I'm looking for critique on my essay minus my ending and my second "abstract concept" .__.</p>
<p>I'll also admit it's not that strong right now - well, it starts pretty nicely but once it's actually personal, it sucks LOL. But anyway, send me a PM or leave you e-mail if you're willing to help xD</p>