CollegeApp Essay Critique and Opinion, Thanks!

<p>If anyone is willing to read, critique, and give me advice on my common app essay It'd be greatly appreciated. Although just a draft I'd really like some insight on where to clear up discrepancies. Thanks again!</p>

<p>Quick bump before the nights end, Anyone?!</p>

<p>Quickly send it over ;D</p>

<p>Thanks! sending it now, Bump for more please!</p>

<p>Sure!! PM your essay</p>

<p>Feel free to PM it to me! :D</p>

<p>Bump, Please no one from Class of 2015… though my essay probably isnt fitting of anyone else.</p>

<p>Bump! 10char</p>

<p>still bumping :/</p>

<p>Bump! have had some great advice just need a couple more opinions!</p>

<p>buuump10char… anyone…?!</p>

<p>PM your essay~~</p>