Common app about influential person.. Could anyone take a look at my essay please?

College Essays
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<p>I really need some people to check my essay.. and comment on it.</p>

<p>Could anyone help me??</p>

<p>I welcome any kind of critique or advice..</p>

<p>If so,, please let me know..</p>

<p>Thank You..</p>

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<p>I really spent much time on it…</p>

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<p>…</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look at it, pm it to me.</p>

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<p>pm me, can u read mine?! il read urs</p>

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<p>you can pm me.</p>

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<p>pm me, I’ll read it!</p>