Common App. EC essay?

Transfer Students
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<p>This is what I wrote so far for the extracurricular essay. </p>

<p>I take pleasure in many different extracurricular activities such as drawing and sculpting human bodies or any living organisms, playing sports, playing musical instruments, and etc., but the one I enjoy the most is writing lyrics. Although this is done at a very personal and basic level yet, I like it immensely because it is one of a very few emotional outlets through which I let my true feelings and deepest thoughts to flow and mix naturally with music. If I get a chance, I’d also like to learn how to compose music and be able to produce my own albums in future. </p>

<p>What do you guys think? any grammar errors? Is it too short?
Also, in high school, I took part in sports, orchestra, clubs etc but now it's mainly stuff I do on my own. Is it okay to put them in the list of EC's in the application?</p>

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<p>For the high school thing, it depends on what year you are. If you are anything above a second semester sophomore, I would reccommend not putting <em>anything</em> from high school, except if you were a superstar. (for instance, if you were all star state every year for 4 years, or found a cure for cancer)
As to your essay, it really depends where you're applying to. If you're applying to a more liberal, artsy school (Emerson, Ithaca, etc) you're going to want to make it more personal feeling and expressive. However, if you're applying to a larger university, then sure, it's good.
Good luck!</p>