Common App Essay...Anyone want to critique?

<p>let me know and I'll PM it...thanks</p>

<p>sure...I'l read it.</p>

<p>Sure, pm me.</p>

<p>I'll read it and try and give you helpful feedback. You can pm me or not. Your choice! :)</p>

<p>anyone else want to take a look?</p>

<p>i can't say i'm an expert, but i can read it if you don't mind =)</p>

<p>It is my pleasure to help you!! ^_^ !!</p>

<p>Sure! I'm all done with mine. :) PM me</p>

<p>Can help out too, if help still be in need.</p>

<p>i'll read it. pm me.</p>

<p>you can PM me if you need help</p>