<p>Hello! I need some fresh perspective on my Common App essay and would like to have it reviewed. I am not looking for comments on my grammar; I just want to see if my essay is cohesive enough for Yale.</p>
<p>I'd prefer current or past Yalies to review my essay, but ANY help is GREATLY appreciated! I'll send through PM.</p>
<p>(Note: I used this essay to answer the second prompt for UC (California). FYI for anyone familiar with the UC procedure.)</p>
<p>Thanks for your time!!!</p>
<p>I’d be willing to take a look. PM it this way! (I have already submitted my application to Yale for the EA pool so I could not plagiarize yours.)</p>
<p>Suggestions sent!</p>
<p>I am submitting my application through Questbridge, so my common app essay is already done. Although I have no experience with accepting or denying people, I’d be happy to take a glance.</p>
<p>Thank you again kidfromvirginia!</p>
<p>I’ll send it over, Zulatooka! Thanks!!</p>
<p><em>BUMP!</em></p>
<p>10char</p>
<p>I’ll give it a read. (current Yale freshman)</p>
<p>Thanks livorneo!</p>
<p>I’ll send.</p>
<p>I’ve already applied SCEA, so you can send it to me if you like.</p>
<p>Thank you, 808drum! I sent it.</p>
<p>I thought I posted this for a minute… 
LOL</p>
<p>^ LOL!</p>
<p>WOAH when I read your comment, I got dizzy trying to remember if I typed that. D:</p>
<p>Nice meeting you!</p>