common app essay help? :(

<p>hey guys,
i'm really worried about my common app essay, that i might be trying to cover too much, or maybe it's just really badly written. it answers "most meaningful place and why" prompt.
is someone able/willing to critique it for me? if I have a goal to pm it to someone, you'll be my reason to get a draft out faster, since it's not done yet...</p>

<p>do not try to cover everything… just few outstanding things</p>