I finally have a solid draft for my common app essay after months of being undecided about what to write about. I intend on applying to a few Ivies but have no idea if my essay is on the right track and will be looked well upon. I was just hoping someone could read it over quickly and let me know if I am on the right track!
I’ll read it for you. Just message me.
PM me, I’d love to read.
i can give you my review 
I’d be happy to read and review your common app for you!
Folks, this request was posted last November.
I’m kind of hoping that the OP has settled on an essay somewhere in the past 9 months.
But I’m going to use it as an example for others.
With all due respect, each of the preceding volunteers appears to be another teen.
It’s generally a better idea to send your essay ONLY to an adult with a proven posting history.
I’m a high school math teacher with 3 teens. Don’t believe me; click on my name and check the threads I’ve started. You’ll see references to my students, my husband, and my kids.
While it was certainly generous of the preceding posters to offer to edit an essay, it’s not always a good idea. It’s entirely possible that someone might read an essay, and like it so much they decide to use it. Then, when the OP submits the essay he/she has written, the plagiarism checkers go nuts.
Please, guys, only submit your essay to an adult with a proven posting history, not another teen.