Common App essay - kinda risky - please help edit!

<p>I used a somewhat different method to tell a story. I'm not sure if it shows much about me. Please help me proofread and edit it, and give comments.</p>

<p>Sure, I'm bored and need something to do, PM to me.</p>

<p>I wouldn't mind</p>

<p>i'll read...</p>

<p>Sure, I'll read. :)</p>

<p>Risky essays are the best, I'll take a look if you like me to.</p>

<p>waooooooo im writing this one,too i'll read!!! and you can take a look of mine :D</p>

<p>PM me...I'll read!</p>

<p>Yeah, risky essays are the best! Me!</p>

<p>I'll read please PM</p>

<p>if you need another person, ill do it</p>