Common App Essay - Need Critiquing

<p>The prompt: Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.</p>

<p>If anyone is willing to read, please PM me. I wrote this essay last year in preparation for applying to colleges and although I -don't- think that it is presently the best possible essay I can write, I need some inspiration/outside opinions so I can make the necessary changes...</p>

<p>I will not take anything personal, so feel free to be brutal.</p>

<p>In addition, if anyone critiquing mine has an essay of their own and would like someone to read it, I will gladly to return the favor.</p>

<p>I’ll take a look and critique if you are willing to look at mine after if so pm me</p>

<p>I’d be willing to</p>