Common App essay; someone help please :)

College Essays
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<p>Does anyone want to please go over my essay? I have revised it about 3-4 times with the help of a few friends and I feel this is as good as it gets from my end. It is for the Common App's topic regarding a personal experience.</p>

<p>Please let me know, and I can PM you.</p>

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<p>i can read it~~</p>

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<p>I don't mind. PM me</p>

<p>Disclaimer: I'm an 09er, but my essays are pretty much in the editing stage.</p>

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<p>ill read, pm me =)</p>

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<p>Hey bro, I'd be glad to give you some feedback.</p>