Common App Essay...too descriptive?

<p>Can anyone give me some feedback on my essay? I've been told I should be less descriptive...? Anyways, the prompt is: </p>

<p>Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.</p>

<p>PM me if interested! Thank you in advance.</p>

<p>I don’t know how you could be too descriptive. I’d love to read it.</p>