<p>hey.. so i just have a general question.. I got in a major car accident sophmore year and it really changed my life (put me out of school and sports for a while etc.) but a lot of the people ive talked to think its a sympathy story.. when in actuality it was quite traumatic... - is this a good idea to write about for my college essays or do you think admissions officers will think im lame?</p>
<p>oh yea.. just a ps. im applying to Stanford EA.. if that makes any difference.. if anyone knows anything gimme some feedback please!</p>
<p>You do know that Stanford EA was due a few days ago?</p>
<p>Anyways, write the essay and see how it develops. The topic strikes me as cliche, but you can still write a great essay. Look it over at the end and dump it if it doesn't turn out well.</p>
<p>it depends on what kind of angle you take on it.
it might end up like, oh look at me, feel sorry for me, kinda essay
or it could show how its really impacted you differently and changed you in a more positive light.</p>
<p>well I already turned it in, but I was just seeing how its going to roll over.. </p>
<p>essentially I wrote it as a creative story - first person.. this is the ending... tell me if you think its sob story ish or worthy of praise...</p>
<p>I finally freed him from the terrible mechanized labyrinth of twisted metal, shredded airbag and convoluted dashboard. Running for the middle divider, we pushed up against the giant steel poles, grasping them, squeezing them tightly as if they were our mothers comforting us. Cars flew by and we all just stared, faces blank, minds, frozen in time. I slammed my phone against the cold concrete as sirens screeched in the distance. I was angry and injured and scared and tired and completely confused. All I could think of was what could have happened. The blood that could have lined those black velvet seats, the screams that could have echoed from our parents and the firemen and paramedics that could have lifted crumpled figures onto stretchers, the hours that could have been spent in a hospital, waiting and crying, the doctors white coat that could have loomed ominously out of the ER, the sting of syringes that could have saved a life, the silent pulse of IVs and the final beeping of a ventilator. But there would be none of that tonight. We all had stood before deaths fateful eyes and passed judgment. Carpe Diem because you may never get another chance.</p>
<p>I do think it's slightly cliche, as countless essays throw out an experience followed by 'live life to the fullest'. </p>
<p>I'd have to see the rest of the essay to pass judgment on anything, but I think you could've taken a deeper angle, and focused more on how it affected/transformed you as a person than how horror-stricken you were or the screams that could have echoed.</p>
<p>yea it is pretty cliche, but its relatively short, and its all written in first person.. the beginning just opens with the scene and what happens - i felt like elaborating would have been a little annoying. short and sweet.</p>
<p>If it's your experience and you saw it that way, then it's fine. Just tell it like you "saw" it (just like you did).</p>