Common App Essay!

<p>I'm doing the "Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story" prompt. The essay is in its middle-ish stage as far as editing/not sounding crappy goes.
If you want to look over it, I'll PM it to you.</p>

<p>Also, I'm applying to the Ivies (big and little), so I need all the help I can get. D:</p>

<p>Thanks! :)</p>

<p>(I asked people to look over my essay on here a couple weeks ago when I had just written it, and I'm posting again since it is a bit better now. And I could use more opinions, of course.)</p>