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College Essays
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<p>Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
Since I was a child, I developed passion for soccer. It helped me expresses my self, which I consider passionate and committed. Soccer creates an atmosphere where I can implement both of my traits. unlike other sports soccer helped me foster sense of friendship instead of violence . As my age went on I realized that soccer was more than passing the ball ; it is passing friendship, respect and admiration to the people I play with. Soccer also helped me keep my body in shape and promote a healthy lifestyle. Playing soccer has also taught me discipline. Whether it’s being on time for practice, or training even when the coach didn't tell me to, sports helped me to define the way I will behave in my future. The lessons I have learned from soccer will stay with me through life. As a child, I thought all I can learn was from book , but I know now that life has many ways to teach me lesson, and soccer was the best fit for me. As many people call it the “beautiful game”, It is indeed beautiful.</p>

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<p>I developed passion for soccer when I was a young child. It brought out two of my most prominent traits, passion and commitment. Unlike other sports, soccer helped me foster a sense of friendship instead of violence . As I grew older, I realized that soccer was about more than passing the ball ; it was passing friendship, respect, and admiration to my teammates. This sport also helped me keep my body in shape and promoted a healthy lifestyle. I have also learned discipline: whether it’s being on time for practice or training even when the coach didn’t tell me to, sports helped me define the way I will behave in my future. The lessons I have learned from soccer will stay with me through life. As a child, I thought all I could learn from was books, but I know now that life has many ways to teach me lessons, and soccer was the best way for me to learn them. Many people call it the “beautiful game,” and I wholeheartedly agree that it is indeed beautiful.</p>

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