commonapp essay - need help!

<p>Would any SCEA Yale ADMIT (gotta take precautions :)! ) be willing to read my common app essay for Yale? It is about an intl event and importance, etc.. but its kinda: cliche, CHEESY (especially the ending)... help! so... someone?</p>

<p>bump 10char :s</p>

<p>sure :)</p>

<p>sure. i can.</p>

<p>Sure, PM it.</p>