Concerns with writing section

<p>So I am on the application, and for the section (section 2) that says "Tell us about a moment of cultural diversity." I'm writing about an extracurricular in-depth. For my section for accomplishments (section 3), etc. i'm talking about that same extracurricular, only it fits that sections requirements. My concern is that they read section 2 before 3, so if I don't explain what the activity is, they will be confused, and if I do shortly explain, they'll think i'm being redundant by explaining it twice when they get to section 3. Please give advice, thanks!</p>

<p>try and take advantage of both sections to highlight two different things that define you instead of trying to pull two ideas from one.</p>

<p>No one wants to read the same essay written a little different explaining something else.</p>

<p>i see. thanks for clearing that up. i have another question. is the writing style in the activity logs supposed to be more straightforward? for example, if i told a quick three-four sentence story at the beginning and then went on to say directly what I learned, what I’ve done, etc., would that be more along the lines of an activity log? and then for the big essay, i’m more creative. thanks, sorry if this sounds confusing.</p>

<p>before you start writing go to UW’s website and then find the about us admissions page.
If you think you fit into a specific category, such as an international applicant or latin american applicant, I would advise finding the admissions councilor who deals with your specific category and see if you can pull up anything they have wrote and published, or read their about me section.</p>

<p>Study how they write, because its how they think and construct ideas. If you structure your application similarly, it will communicate more effectively.</p>

<p>This is just an idea.</p>

<p>back to your question.</p>

<p>=I split my personal statement up into two parts.
try to pull from two areas of rhetoric. Pathos and Ethos.</p>

<p>For the ethos part, build your character by talking about school and ****.
For pathos talk about marginalization and kampf.</p>

<p>These should not be as straight forward and have your concluding thoughts be about what you learned/ how you were defined differently.</p>

<p>=As for activity log, I am not sure how they read it/grade it, but I would try to be as direct as possible.
Watch the presidential debates and get into a defensive/confrontational mood, that should help.</p>

<p>let me conclude by saying I hate writing and scored in the bottom 3% of adults on a writing amplitude test. followed by a 7 on the ACT for writing… lol</p>

<p>The activity log should be very straight forward. Here is one of mine (although I think this was 1-2 drafts from my final version … couldn’t find that though). It’s probably the most generic of my 5 extra curriculars; the others identify me individually quite well (copy pasting parts of them will yield results on Google).</p>

<p>[High School] Tennis Team
I was the team captain of the [Redacted] High School tennis team my junior year. As the captain, the coach looks at me as an able backup in case of her absence. I am responsible for setting up the team lineup for the next game, communicating important information to team members, and representing the team during meetings. I really enjoy the competitive aspects of the game. Tennis has also taught me how to focus and to think quickly on my feet. I lettered in tennis and also took second place at the [League Tournament]. I have been playing tennis for eight years and also play USTA matches as team captain of a club-based junior tennis team.</p>

<p>You want to answer a few questions for each of your extra curricular activities:
-What did you do? Responsibilities?
-What did this mean to you?
-What did you learn/gain from this experience?</p>