constructive criticism needed

College Essays
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<p>I plan on applying to top schools (Yale SCEA), with Brown, Dartmouth, and Harvard as my other top choices regular decision. I have written a rough draft, and would like as much criticism as possible, since I have so much time to work on it. It would be great if somebody would volunteer to read it :)</p>

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<p>I'll volunteer. =]</p>

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<p>Sure, PM it.</p>

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<p>Of Course. Please PM it to me.</p>

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<p>ill take on the task! =)</p>

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<p>sure, just PM me.</p>

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<p>sure! i'm up for it!</p>

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<p>Hi! PM it for me</p>

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<p>hello! i'll be glad to help out. PM it please</p>