Constructive Feedback Needed!

<p>I have an essay for the commonapp topic: "Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you"</p>

<p>Although, I believe, my essay answeres the topic "Evaluate a significant experience" I'm not so sure whether it explians the impact on me.</p>

<p>Anyone up for some tearing essay apart?
Any constructive feedbacks would be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>i'd be happy to help, pm me</p>

<p>pm me
i'll help</p>

<p>I'm happy to help you. PM me.</p>

<p>i'll read it</p>

<p>PM me</p>