<p>Hi, sorry for this short question but how would I go in writing this sentence correctly.</p>
<p>"Stock tickers flashing, investors scrambling, papers flying everywhere - ah, the glamour of Wall St."</p>
<p>BTW its for a college admission essay. Should I even use the word "ah?"</p>
<p>um you shouldnt abbreviate Street. wow, this is nice irony</p>
<p>I think it would be better if it read:
"Stock tickers flashing, investors scrambling, and papers flying (these?) are the the glamours of Wall Street." I don't know lol. Unless the rest of your essay uses things from speech like "ah" I don't think you should put that there. Just my 2 cents :)</p>
<p>Hm this might work too "Stock tickers flashing, investors scrambling, and papers flying everywhere; such is the glamour of Wall Street"</p>
<p>I like your original. The conversational "ah" personalizes the reaction and projects your personality in a way that something more expository doesn't. Particularly if this is the lead-in to prose that's a little more straightlaced, I think it'll be very effective. Nice images, too!</p>
<p>Yep. I like the "ah" as well. It gives it voice.</p>
<p>OP, keep your original sentence. It works well.</p>
<p>The original sentence is fine. Just write out "street."</p>
<p>i agree with the guys above, keep the original sentence.. tis' nice</p>