Could anybody give me input on my Essay intro?

<p>I want to know if it's worth keeping or throwing out. It's only a paragraph so far so it'll only take a minute to read. thanks to anyone who can help me!</p>

<p>quick bump</p>

<p>please? ='(</p>

<p>if this bump fails, well, i think i’ll leave this alone</p>

<p>Don’t be so hasty! These things take longer than 50 mins! pm it over, ill help you out.</p>

<p>any more takers?</p>