<p>Do we expect too much from our public figures? Plan your response, and then write an essay...</p>
<p>There are many public figures around the world that make many significant contributions to us. We do not expect too much from our public figures, because they have a purpose in the society. Every person becomes a public figure if they did fulfill an extraordinary achievement or have fascinating talent. These people are famous because they serve a purpose and they can appeal to the people around the world.
Public figures have a different status in society. For example, Obama is the president of the Unites States and he is not treated like another ordinary man. Obama serves a purpose in our country. The president oversees the federal bureaucracy, presents Congress with proposals for legislation, and
sets national policy by implementing federal regulations. Obama represents our governments the head. We do expect a lot because if the president causes something to go offhand, the country will topple over, which is not good. If the president does not make any contributions to the country and does not ponder on how to improve the economy everything will be a disaster. In order for us to have a stable environment, public figures should serve their purpose well and keeping high expectations.
Public figures are famous because they appeal to the people around the world. We have to expect a lot from these figures because they are eminent due to the fact that they are responsible. For instance, a CEO of a company has many things to handle in the business. It is obvious that the head of the CEO, at one point, promoted this average employee into such a high status. This is mostly done by responsibility. If one is responsible and has greatness for things then they can be successful. We expect a lot from these people because they came through many stages that required responsibility.
All in all, we do not expect too much from our public figures, because they have a purpose in the society. Public figures like Obama and CEO’s of the companies play part as examples of people with high status and more responsibility. Meeting the high expectations of the people is the factor that will make someone a public figure. </p>
<p>Every person becomes a public figure if they did fulfill an extraordinary achievement
^ I don’t think “did” is necessary. *fulfilled</p>
<p>For example, Obama is the president of the Unites States
^ First of all, name him by first and last name. Second, *United States.</p>
<p>Obama serves a purpose in our country.
^ You have said “serves a purpose” about five times so far. So repetitive!</p>
<p>Obama represents our governments the head.
^ This doesn’t make any sense.</p>
<p>if the president causes something to go offhand
^ Neither does this. </p>
<p>the country will topple over,
^ I’m picturing America at the top of a cliff. “Topple over” does not mean the same thing as “be damaged.”</p>
<p>and does not ponder on how to improve the economy
^ Is this your requirement to be president? You must think about the economy? “Well, I thought about the economy, guess I’ve done my job for today.”</p>
<p>and has greatness for things
^ Weird wording. Is English your first language?</p>
<p>Overall, this essay is strangely constructed and somewhat boring. It repeats itself numerous times and is plagued by grammar and spelling errors. Try again? :(</p>
<p>Crappy prompt IMO but to make it sound good you need to relate this with a personal experience you know about excepting something from some kind of public figure (could be someone as simple as your local church pastor) </p>
<p>You need more specific examples besides president Obama. And even though you reference the POTUS, you don’t have a specific example. You could have plugged any name in there and said the same thing. Include examples of what happened to specific public figures. Were their personal lives dragged through the mud which had nothing to do with their public figure standing? This essay is repetitive and too generic. Do some research and try again.</p>
<p>I agree with a lot of the statements above. It was a bit redundant. I also agree that it was a breathtakingly crappy prompt. Still, there are things you can do with it. As stated above, the essay should be more about you. That should be the purpose of a college essay. The admissions officers aren’t looking for an eloquent essay about the history of politics. They want to learn something about you that doesn’t show up on the rest of the application. </p>
<p>You could try talking about political expectations toward the beginning before leading into a connectng subject. For example, does a particular politician’s philosophy about expectations match your own philosophy? Do you feel that too much is expected of you? Do expectations drive you to be a better person, or do you believe that expectation is a destructive and selfish force in society?</p>
<p>I will also agree your intro seemed a bit dry. You could try opening with an original profound thought, a humorous narrative, an unconventional metaphor, or whatever happens to fit the tone of the rest of the essay. Personally, I would advise against beginning with a quote or question, though. It’s a little overdone and, consequently, is hard to make stand out as creative.</p>
<p>Might be too late for my replies but it is a great essay and it foresees all aspects of being a public figure…though too late but it is a great essay although could have added a little more familiarity but keep it up.</p>