I wrote this essay for a scholarship a little while back. However, do you think that I could also use it for my college applications? For my college application, I want an essay that really provides insight into who I am while showcasing my excellent rhetoric. Do you think that this essay meets up to these high expectations?
<pre><code> A few of the elementary schools in our school district have low science scores on national standardized tests. Because of this, our high schools volunteer coordinator organized several science outreach programs. These programs were aimed at exposing local children to science and fostering a love for science within them. The most prominent of these programs was the Science Mentoring Program.
I was honored when the volunteer coordinator offered me the opportunity to participate in this program. The thought of reaching out to young children really excited me! However, the coordinator also warned me that working with young children could be physically and emotionally taxing.
Physically and emotionally taxingI would not realize the truth to her words until I actually mentored the children. Every minute with them was a constant struggle to either get them to do their work or to just sit down and be quiet. The children were so boisterous, and they initially did not seem interested in learning science. One child even remarked, I dont like science. Ill never be good at it. So, why bother? I asked her why she felt this way, and she remarked that ever since she was young, people have always told her that she couldnt be good at school.
Watching her succumb to such negative expectations really horrified me. She was only in the fourth grade and, already, her life was so bleak and jumbled with so much despair and resignation. Someone(s) had convinced her that she could not learn things such as science, and she had resigned to these expectations. The saddest part about the situation was the fact that she was brilliant. She had so much potential.
I felt compelled to enact a change within her and all of the other childrens lives. It was my moral obligation to show all of them just how special they truly were. So, whenever they did something right, I congratulated them and prodded them to keep doing those things. Everyday, when I went to the science club, I filled their day with as much love and enthusiasm for science as I could possibly offer.
Watching a newfound love for science develop within the children really touched me. The children took on a greater scientific enthusiasm than I had never imagined. Science now fascinated them, and they wanted to know so much about it. Towards the end of the program, the same girl who had told me that she couldnt do science now came up to me and said Veronica, I love science. Its fun, interesting, and Im good at it. Hearing her say this brought tears to my eyes.
Looking at this experience in retrospect, I now realize that I have done one of the greatest things that a person could do. Okay, I may have not have won a Nobel Prize or saved the world, but I positively touched a young childs life. By doing this, I positively touched the world.
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