Could someone anyone please critique my UC personal stament prompt 1 essay?

<p>I know I really procrastinated with this due in like 3 days. Any help would be highly appreciated. Private message me if you would like to help,thanks :) </p>

<p>I’m an English tutor, and I’d be happy to help!</p>

<p>I can. </p>

<p>I’ll do it.</p>

<p>I will read it and comment. </p>