Could someone critique my Common App essay?

<p>Hi, feeling kind of anxious and nervous about my essay. If someone could help me out, I'd greatly appreciate it. </p>

<p>You can PM it to me, I am happy to review and give some feedback.</p>

<p>Happy to help. </p>

<p>Thank you! Anybody else?</p>

<p>I would happily help</p>

<p>PM me, my post history will show that I’ve already graduated.</p>