Could Someone Please Comment On My Essay?

<p>I have written an essay describing my background, but I am not too confident about how well it portrays me.</p>

<p>Would someone please read over my essay and tell me the impression that it has left on you?</p>

<p>How can I make it better?</p>

<p>Please reply, and I will PM you with the essay.</p>

<p>email it to me at <a href="mailto:agrawalriju@yahoo.com">agrawalriju@yahoo.com</a>, and I will look at it.</p>